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[fel87]

Hallo! Könntet ihr bitte die beiden Texte korrigieren. vielen vielen dank!!!

Die Aufgabenstellung lautet:

1. Summary of the Chapter 11 of the novel "The Body" by Stephen King

2. Analyze the relationship between the boys!

3. Kann mir bitte jemand erklären wie man Texte analysiert? (nicht nur auf Englisch)

1. The Chapter 11 taken from Stephen King’s novel “The Body” is about crying Teddy. He cries because Milo told him that his father is a madman. Vern Tessio tells the other bosy about his dreams and feelings if sees the dead body.


2.When the four boys reach the bridge Teddy suddenly bursts into tears because Milo tells him that his father is a Madman. (p. 25 l. 15) Teddy loves his father and he is very proud of him. His father was in the war and he was ain Normandy. Vern triedsto calm him down but he is not good at it. (p. 25 l. 20) The boys do not know what to do. But Chris is both the hardest boy in their gang and he is also the guy who makes the best piece. (p. 25 ll. 24-25) He is very good at it. (p. 25 l. 25) At this situation we can see that they all are the bestof friends and treat each other like very good friends. They understand each other very well and do not treat Teddy like a pussy although his behaviour is like a pussy. Chris speaks with him like an adult to an adult although both boys are under sixteen years old. He convinces Teddy that Milo does not know Teddy’s father and he only wanted to get Teddy and take him to the police. (p. 26 ll.19-22). Teddy believes him and stops c rying and being sad. At this moment it becomes clear that the guys trust each other.
Teddy asks the other guys if he is like a baby. (p. 26 l. 27) And the other boys denyl it because they know that they have to support Teddy in this difficult moment. The guys support each other i when someone has problems. It shows that they are real ly good friends.
But Gordie cannot understand Teddy because they all know that his Teddy’s father had almost killed him (p. 26-27 ll.33-1) Gordie’s parents do not care oabout him and he ca not love or hate his father because his father never had beaten him and that is why he cannot understand his friend Teddy.
Vern tells the other boys about his dreams and feelings which he might have after seeing the dead body (p. 27 ll. 14-18). He tells the truth and it improves that they trust each other and they can listen to the problems of their friends. After his speech he wants the other boys not to tell what he said to the other:” We all said we wouldn’t”.

[richard]

Verbesserte Fassung im Englischforum!

[fel87]

und wie komme ich zu disem englischforum?

[richard]

Du gehsteinfach auf deine erste Nachricht im Forum Englisch und findest dort die Korrigierte Fassung deines Textes!n OK?

[fel87]

sorry, aber ich habs nicht gefunden.. könntest du mir vllt den link geben. DANKE!

[Kevin]

sorry, aber ich habs nicht gefunden.. könntest du mir vllt den link geben. DANKE!

Hmmm... wenn ich mich nicht irre, redet ihr grade meilenweit aneinander vorbei

Schau doch bitte mal ganz oben in deinen Ausgangsbeitrag, ob darin korrigiert wurde, ich würde mal behaupten, Richard hat deinen Beitrag editiert, sodass er jetzt die verbesserte Fassung beinhaltet. Ansonsten wüsste ich nämlich nicht, was er meinen könnte.

[richard]

Kevi hat Recht. Du findest die Korrekturen-allerdings nicht markiert- in deinem ursprünglichen Text.

[fel87]

Kevi hat Recht. Du findest die Korrekturen-allerdings nicht markiert- in deinem ursprünglichen Text.

ok, vielen vielen dank. Der Text ist aber keine analyse oder?

[richard]

Dein Text enthält eine Menge Material für eine Analyse. Um den Aufgabencharakter klarer hervorzuheben, müsstest du aber das Analytische mehr in den Vordergrund stellen und dann die HANDLUNGSASPEKTE als Beweismateria benutzen. Tipp:

Schon der erste Satz muss direlekt auf das Thema (Analyse) eingehen.